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kelly_chambliss ([personal profile] kelly_chambliss) wrote in [personal profile] paulamcg 2020-08-22 03:46 pm (UTC)

This is just lovely -- quiet, intense, and fragrant, just like being in an orchard at sunset. Luna and Remus make a lot of sense together, and I love that she has a bat friend named Basil! I also like seeing the scenes through Remus's pov: he's poignant, self-deprecating yet realistic, and full of complexity. The political/social situations make an effective background.

You create such an atmospheric picture; your imagery is every effective as well. So many fine touches -- I can feel the dampness as Remus walks, hear the crack of the apple as he bites, see the crimson clouds.

The apple, of course, is a great choice of focus; all its powerful symbolism works very well for a story of "temptation" to which the yielding is a blessing, not a curse.

Just a perfect story for late summer -- still warm, rich with endings and harvests and the seeds of the future.

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